I’m not going to change the general tone or point of the emails but I am trying to ensure he remains anonymous by changing some of the specifics.
Here is my reader’s first email to a girl who was originally from the same area as him Lonestar State What’s up?
I change it from brunch to coffee because coffee is easier to do than brunch for most people (and I can’t help but wonder if every guy would ask her out to brunch because it’s in her profile).
I’ve added what could be considered a weird email title because I’ve found odd email titles encourage opening the email. Here’s his final email example: Hang Gliding Hi, how do you do?
I love going to the Space Needle, the museums, and Pike Market just to name a few activities. down to earth, genuine, and fun are what I look for in other people. What’s your favorite part(s) about living in the city? I am absolutely in love with Seattle although I’m new here from Houston a few months ago…what’s the best place for someone new to the city to go? I realize this might look like not enough but for me keeping it short like this worked well in first emails.
There wasn’t anything “wrong” in his email but if she replied to my first email that’s when I’d start asking some of those questions. I recently moved to Seattle for work from Texas and I really love it here so far.
If you see an 10 emails in your inbox with the title “Hi” and one with the title “Courage! You have a great outlook on life, and it seems like a good head on your shoulders.
I think it’s really important to make everyday fun.
As with the earlier emails, I felt this email had too much of him describing himself and describing what he saw in her.
Not bad conversations, just happening too early and maybe better to be had in person (depends on who you’re talking to I guess).
Here I started with his basic premise but also ended with that.